WAY too fast forward. I noticed a few grammar errors, erm.. in-all the story could be quite good.. Also, whilst having a conversation.. using ‘-’ instead of “ ” looks weird, but you've got a style, I can give you credit for that. But uh..yeah, this story didn't catch my eye, didn't make me feel anything nor did it appeal to me as a romantic short story. As I said; it was way too fast forward.